11 July 2013

Write Tribe contest # 1



I peeked into my son’s room to let him know he had received a postcard from his friend.  I saw him lying on the bed, idly watching television and flipping a coin.

“My my, aren’t we tidy!”  I said sarcastically.

His room looked like wild horses had galloped through it.

“Maa!” my darling son bleated, “instead of being so sarcastic, you could help, you know”

I walked into the room and straightened a calendar that was lying face down.

“No dear! Your room is your responsibility.  You must learn how to keep it clean:  Now pick up the stuff, change your sheets and PLEASE dust everything.  If you want your weekly allowance on Monday as usual, that is.”

I marched out of the room mindful of his indignant looks, but not caring.  I leaned against the door and heard him scurrying around the room, tidying up.

“Yessssss” I said to myself, triumphantly.








Write Tribe





This post is written as a part of  write tribe initiative.

The rules are:

1. Write a piece/a story/ a poem incorporating the following  7 words in random order :
  •   postcard
  •   coin
  •   tidy
  •  wild
  •  help
  •  calendar
  •  responsibility








13 comments:

  1. Very nice, Ava. Very intelligent use of the keywords. :-)

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  2. wow...a realistic portrayal of a mom and her son...beautifully written ...

    Sreedev Soman @ KookyDom

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  3. What a beautiful story!!A good lesson for the sonny boy!!

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  4. Raja: Thanks for revealing the purpose behind that little story - I thought those italicised words might be part of the theme, but couldn't be sure.

    Ava: Good one! And, a good mum. ;-)

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  5. Thanks for taking part, Ava. Reading through all the posts now and enjoying everyone of them.
    Only threats work with kids! ;)

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  6. Raja : Thank you for the comment.

    Sreedev: Thank you. :)

    Ushaji : I read those keywords and things just fell into place, thanks.

    Madhu: Thanks Madhu. Reading your comment made me realise I needed to put in the rules of contest in my blog, so it would be clear to all readers.

    Corinne: Thank you Corinne. You have made me try and write more regularly.

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  7. Great use of the words and I like how you made a complete story in such a short word count.

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  8. Ha! I used to have similar exchanges with my mother, back in the day. Great use of all the words! Enjoyable post, Ava. :-)

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  9. Good, good!
    Piece/Peace of real life, eh?
    Have put the keywords to good use!

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  10. Oh so it was part of a writing contest and nothing more ! I must say your son is quite well behaved, and easily gives in.

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  11. Actually... he hates to have me clean up his room. He likes to do everything, even change the sheets himself :) Thanks Atul

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